Congrats on getting your book finished! I used the "Look Inside" feature on Amazon to read the first seven chapters.
The way it reads, you might think of writing it as a screenplay. But if you do, write it in chronological order and don't use the flashbacks.
There are a couple of glaring mistakes
that diminish the credibility of the book. Since this was posted on a cruising forum, I focused on the accuracy of the sailing parts
"There was still daylight, skies leaden, wind
thirty knots or more judging by the size of the swells and the wind-driven spray. Sails
were up, the wind
driving them hard onto the rocks. No way to get them down, not now."
"They'd been forced into a bad anchorage last night, the wind howling in the rigging
and threatening to push them onto a lee shore. He'd stayed awake through it all, checking on the anchor
, watching their position, ensuring they stayed safe. He had been exhausted, and he'd started to trust her. That's why he'd agreed to get some sleep while she took a turn at the helm
- You wouldn't have both (all?) sails up (plural, so it's more than one) in thirty-plus knots of wind. You'd likely have only a reefed main.
- Sails were up driving them hard into the rocks. Wait, what? It says they were forced into a bad anchorage, wind howling in the rigging; that he checked on the anchor. They anchored with the sails up? Holy cow! In thirty knots of wind? Unbelievable! This guy must be related to Robert Redford in "All is Lost."
- Typically, a person doesn't "take a turn at the helm" at anchor. They might "keep watch" to make sure the anchor doesn't drag.
"When the weather
was bad, they'd stop for the night, trying to find anchorages
that were both convenient and secure."
- What happens when the weather is good? They just keep sailing?
- Sailors plan their routes based on the available anchorages along the way. Finding an anchorage isn't an afterthought of bad weather coming in. Competent sailors plan their passages to include safe anchorages. Forget convenience. Is your main character incompetent?
- They would also know the weather forecast in this day and age. Or at least they should.
The sentence structure is correct, as is spelling and punctuation.
The pacing is really quick, and often feels rushed. More description would help slow it down.
This is a great book for the young adult, junior high school
This is a solid first effort. For your next project
, it would be worth hiring an editor to give it a fresh look with that all important "second set of eyes," preferably someone who has solid knowledge of the subject matter.
A lot of people dream of writing a book, but only a few actually put the work in and see it through. Good job!
Best of luck to you!